Semarang State University (SSU) is the sixth most favourite campus in Indonesia, according to the kompas.com. Semarang State University located in Semarang, capital city of Central Java, Indonesia. It has eight (8) faculties, they are the faculty of education science, the faculty of languages and arts, the faculty of social science, the faculty of mathematics and natural science, the faculty of engineering, the faculty of sports science, the faculty of economics, and the faculty of law. The student body is approximately 40.000 students enrolled in those 8 faculties. Semarang State University has a mission of conservation. It is conrvate the culture through traditional dance department and javanesse department. Semarang State University also built an eco-green were 1/4 part of Semarang State University is beautiful garden which is growen by multiple trees. Many of collage students of Semarang State University are go joging and sight seeing in the afternoon. There are no motorcycle and car a lot to pass the area of campus from 7 am until 4 pm.
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Dear Rury, I love reading your piece of writing. It is easy to understand the ideas because they are well structured. The data presented are accurate and precise. Nevertheless, there are some points that you need to work on.
- Spelling: you need to always reread your writing carefully and check the meaning of words you use in dictionary to avoid some mistakes. For example, you write “conrvate” in line 7 what is the meaning of conrvate ? maybe you will write “conservate” which should be “conserve”, “javanesse” which should be “javanese” (line 8), “is growen” which should be “is grown” (line 10), “collage” which should be “college” (line 10), and “joging” which should be “jogging” (line 11).
- Article, I understand that the use of proper article is always confusing. It seems that you need to check the use of a/an or the. For example, “campus” in the 1st line should be written as “the campus” because the subject has been fixed.
- Punctuation, dear to write “sightseeing” (line 11) there is no space between “sight and seeing”.
- Word economics you need to think of how to make your writing efficient. For example
- “Semarang State University also built an eco-green were 1/4 part of Semarang State University is beautiful garden which is grown by multiple trees” the sentence is too long. Therefore, you need to cut that into “In Semarang State University is also built an eco-green which one-fourth of it is beautiful garden”(line 8). Overall, your writing is well-thought-out. Good job
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